Talk:Gabor B. Racz/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 08:50, 27 November 2014 (UTC)

• I propose to take on this review and will make some detailed comments on the article in the next couple of days. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 08:50, 27 November 2014 (UTC)

First reading

• "He attended Semmelweis University Medical School in 1956 during the time of the Hungarian Revolution against Soviet occupation." - It would be better to say that he was attending the medical school at the time of the Soviet invasion.
• You should avoid the words "persecution" (NPOV) and "unexpected" (peacock) and just state the facts.
• Was he married to Enid at the time of the escape or did they marry later? The article implies the former.
• "He served as organizing Chairman of the Department of Anesthesiology at TTUHSC from 1977 to 1999," - This has already been stated at the beginning of the section and is repeated in paragraph 4.
• "The procedure involves the injection of a 3% phenol solution via the C7 approach under fluoroscopy." - This sentence is too jargon-laden.

In general the prose is of a high quality. My main concern is that the article reads as if it was written not by a neutral observer but by someone too close to the subject. That's all for now. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:46, 28 November 2014 (UTC)

Cwmhiraeth - thank you for taking the time to review this article. Please rest assured, there is no closeness to the subject on my part. In fact, I have a much closer relationship to some of the fish I've written about. My responses to your list of concerns follows:

• • It would be better to say that he was attending the medical school at the time of the Soviet invasion. - Actually, it would not be correct because Hungary fell to Soviet occupation during World War II. See the FA, Hungarian Revolution of 1956, wherein it states that it "was a spontaneous nationwide revolt against the government of the Hungarian People's Republic and its Soviet-imposed policies."

It was the tense of the verb that I was referring to. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:32, 30 November 2014 (UTC)

Cwmhiraeth - My apologies. I misunderstood your suggestion. Thank you for clarifying. ✅

• • You should avoid the words "persecution" (NPOV).... - After I read some of the resources about the revolution, and also, Hungarian Revolution of 1956, which included statements such as, "Thousands were arrested, tortured, tried, and imprisoned in concentration camps, deported to the east, or were executed,...", I felt "escaped persecution" was a well stated fact. I hope you will reconsider removal. I did remove "unexpected" per your suggestion.

As far as I could make out, he wasn't persecuted, but thought he was likely to be. I still see "unexpected" in the article. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:32, 30 November 2014 (UTC)

Ok, I see you're point. Hopefully, it is fixed now. I also added a couple of new inline citations to validate the change. Re: "unexpected" - I forgot to save the correction. Gotta remember to order some Prevagen. ✅

• • Was he married to Enid at the time of the escape.... - Article states..."a young Racz and his wife, Enid, escaped...", so yes, they were married. Is there a better way I could have phrased it?

I just thought that as she was only 17 at the time of the escape, they might have married subsequently. The point is unimportant. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:32, 30 November 2014 (UTC)

• • He served as organizing Chairman of the Department of Anesthesiology.... - I fixed it, and tightened up the prose a bit. ✅
  • The procedure involves the injection of a 3% phenol solution... - Fixed. ✅Atsme☯^Consult 03:47, 29 November 2014 (UTC)

GA criteria

• The article is well written and complies with MOS guidelines on prose and grammar, structure and layout.
• The article uses reliable third-party sources, and makes frequent citations to them. I do not believe it contains original research.
• The article covers the main aspects of the subject and remains focussed.
• The article is neutral.
• The article is stable.
• The images are relevant and have suitable captions and are properly licensed.

• Final assessment - I believe this article reaches the GA criteria. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:49, 1 December 2014 (UTC)